Obesity+Report

We made a rubric to assess our reports. This is the one I made.



This is my first draft.

Child Obesity Introduction: The dictionary says very fat. But is it just “very fat?” No it is a lot more than that. Did you know that 1 in 5 children are obese. And this is only a tiny bit of the problem. Obesity is a big problem and we need to do something about it.

Paragraph 1: Child obesity is when you are very fat and don’t exercise. It is sweeping the country into a big problem. Obese children are becoming unhealthy and when this happens they will start needing medical attention because of lots of things. Such as: Hypothyroidism, Cushing’s syndrome and depression. But these are only a little amount of the effects. Child obesity is mostly caused by not exercising and eating too many kilojoules, for example: junk food. Obesity is measured by an internet application called a BMI. If you want to do your BMI yourself you can follow 3 easy steps. 1: Work out what your height in metres is and then multiply the figure by itself. 2: Measure your weight in kilograms. 3: Divide the weight by the height squared. Then take that number and search up obesity BMI on the internet.

Paragraph 2: Obesity in everybody revolves around junk food. All of the junk food restaurants such as Mc Donald’s, Burger King and your local fish and chips store, have food so cheap that people just go for the easy option and buy their breakfast/ lunch/ dinner. Did you know that the number of obese people in the world has gone up by 10 percent between 1997 and 2007 and that Maori and pacific cultural groups seem to be the ones who suffer the most from obesity.

Paragraph 3: I think that the government should make a pamphlet about what a good diet has in it. And should send them out to every household in New Zealand and while they are doing that they should make a cartoon that encourages kids to eat fruit and vegetables. The active schools programme should cover as many schools as possible to maybe help kids be healthy.

Conclusion: Being obese makes all of your life options shorten, for example: You won’t be able to do any running and you might get big medical problems. You also might just not even fit through the door. (And you don’t want that to happen.) This is why obesity is a big problem so let’s try and defeat the evil of obesity.



This is my second draft.

Child Obesity Introduction: The dictionary says very fat. But is it just “very fat?” No it is a lot more than that. Did you know that 1 in 5 children are obese. And this is only a tiny bit of the problem. Obesity is a big problem and we need to do something about it.

Paragraph 1: Child obesity is when you are very fat and don’t exercise. It is sweeping the country into a big problem. Obese children are becoming unhealthy and when this happens they will start needing medical attention. Such as: Hypothyroidism, Cushing’s syndrome and depression. But these are only a little amount of the effects. Child obesity is mostly caused by not exercising and eating too many kilojoules, for example: junk food. Obesity is measured by an internet application called a BMI. If you want to do your BMI yourself you can follow 3 easy steps. 1: Work out what your height in metres is and then multiply the figure by itself. 2: Measure your weight in kilograms. 3: Divide the weight by the height squared. Then take that number and search up obesity BMI on the internet. Did you know that the number of obese people in the world has gone up by 10 percent between 1997 and 2007 and that Maori and pacific cultural groups seem to be the ones who suffer the most from obesity.

Paragraph 2: Obesity in everybody revolves around junk food. All of the junk food restaurants such as Mc Donald’s, Burger King and your local fish and chips store, have food so cheap that people just go for the easy option and buy their breakfast/ lunch/ dinner. And do you actually know what you are eating when you go to a Mc Donald’s or Burger King restaurant? That’s right, some of the things that they say they are in the burger actually aren’t. There things much worse.

Paragraph 3: I think that the government should make a pamphlet about what a good diet has in it. But just to be safe this is what a good diet has in it. One of my pictures shows a good diet. And should send them out to every household in New Zealand and while they are doing that they should make a cartoon that encourages kids to eat fruit and vegetables. The active schools programme should cover as many schools as possible to maybe help kids be healthy.

Conclusion: Being obese makes all of your life options shorten, for example: You won’t be able to do any running and you might get big medical problems. You also might just not even fit through the door. (And you don’t want that to happen.) This is why obesity is a big problem so let’s try and defeat the evil of obesity. By the way both of the report have the photos in the middle. By Harry Ash